To Auckland 3.2.17
Here is my first recount for 2017
My mum said we were going to Auckland we were so excited we pack up to go Auckland and we zoomed to the car.
Broom broom! the car went, we zoomed to Auckland and we saw my cousins Ashton and Adoni and my two little cousins. They got so excited that they nearly bowled me over.
We got dinner. After dinner we played and later we went to bed. We got up in the morning and zoomed out the door to go and play on the the park, we got all dizzy so we zoomed back to play at home. I had a rest and then it was dark then me and Adoni zoomed to the fireworks. When we woke up, papa asked us if we wanted to go for a walk. We all got ready but then my cousins weren't allowed to go because their dad said so. I asked my mum and she said yes and I was allowed. I was happy and we went for a walk, Papa, Nana and me.
One week later we had to go home. Broom broom! The car started then we zoomed back home, then into town to get something to eat because we were hungry.
It was nice to see my cousins .
Hi Cassidy my name is Tamarah I am from Kawakawa Primary School. I liked how you used descriptive words but I think you used to much of the word zoomed and next times you should use flashed or dashed.
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